Tuesday 17 July 2012

In making...



(Pic from Magpie tales)

Lingering long, eyes
Cups storms and breeze
Building and crumpling
They make her heart an ocean
Waves over waves
A deep stillness of secrets inside
Time stands still for her decision to come…..

16 comments:

  1. You have presented a vivid imagery of the stillness of the surroundings, of the indecisiveness of moments, of wait.

    If one reads it slowly, taking words in, letting them sink, then this poem reads BEAUTIFUL, Sreeja. :)

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  2. Nice deciphering of the picture. Thought u seem to miss the punctuation again.

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    1. Thank you LC...and spare me for that my lord.....will surely take care..

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  3. nice...i really like that deep stillness of secrets inside, just like the waves....great way to set the mood in this...

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  4. It's all for her to endure and resolve. It's a personal thing. Time is an element that helps to ease the shock. Wonderful write Sreeja!

    Hank

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  5. you've made waiting sensual. finely written.

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    1. Oh thats so appreciating comment..thank you so much for this support....

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  6. The heart truly is an ocean...

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  7. ......and what will she decide!

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    1. Hmmm...must wait and see...thank you....:-)

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  8. I love the mystery here, Sreeja.

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