Friday 3 August 2012

Jill and his greed.


Aladdin’s magic lamp, and with it Jill came trembling after,
Yes, after whom? And why? You may wonder,
Jill was a bit over ambitious than jack by nature,
So to have Genie as slave he dived from an upper tor yonder.

Yes, after whom? And why? You may wonder;
After a flabbergasted rabbit and for Jill’s hunger,
So to have genie as slave he dived from an upper tor yonder,
He stumbled and fumbled upon a stupendous gobbler.

After a flabbergasted rabbit and for Jill’s hunger:
As he ran from Jack with the lamp for a prize (err),
He stumbled and fumbled upon a stupendous gobbler,
Aladdin’s magic lamp, and with it Jill came trembling after.

9 comments:

  1. haha...much enjoyed your pantoum...great creative topic and story telling..ah..what would we do if we had that magic lamp...smiles

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  2. I love the SOUNDS of this poem as it rumbles along with its delightfully absurd tale sans bumble bees! I am humbled.

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  3. Wow ... what a fascinating imagination ... I guess it's one of your best works that I have read :-)

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  4. haha...love the retelling of the nursery rhyme...smiles....a magic lamp...i might come trembling after as well...smiles.....wonder what my wishes might be...

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  5. Nice form...I can imagine all of them going after the lamp to make a slave out of the genie ~

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  6. Lyrical and whimsical, and the pantoum lends itself well to the nursery rhyme air.

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  7. Nicely done, Sreeja! That's quite a different take on the prompt. :)

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  8. Sreeja, this is a light and playful piece, the words are flaky and quizzical, I'm feeling them tumble as I read along. So much fun and very much so unique. :)

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