Friday 14 September 2012

Bottlenecked


Surging rainbow dreams nest-
ing bosom, the common mob, wailing,
as rain drops splatt-
ed, mourning seven colored dreams.
Bottlenecked sunshine, bureaucracy, shout-
ed thundering mockery
from behind lust-
ful dark clouds.
Yearning for sun the rain,
dripping, mourning seven colored dreams.

20 comments:

  1. Bottlenecked sunshine... love that. Thanks for participating, Sreeja.

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  2. You have used some wonderful words and concepts there, Sreeja.

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  3. Like Laurie I loved the idea of bottlenecked sunshine!

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  4. "Yearning for sun the rain,
    dripping, mourning seven colored dreams." - Great line !!!

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  5. I too love bottlenecked sunshine...what a creative expression

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  6. What gorgeous imagery! Love the phrase "mourning seven colored dreams," that will stick with me for quite some time.

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  7. Thanks to the prompt that created the images.....happy to have everybody here.....:-)

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  8. Beautiful! I love your play on words, 7 colored dreams...magical!

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  9. oooooh! love the seven colored dreams! i agree with Ella ~ magical!

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  10. I do like 'bottlenecked sunshine.' So often when the sun hides behind the clouds for days it really DOES seem bottlenecked! Another nice write, Sreeja.

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  11. The angst seeps off the page, here. Emotional and concise. Well done.
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/09/15/constricted/

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  12. I love the repetition of "mourning seven colored dreams". Beautiful writing!

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  13. ". . . thundering mockery
    from behind lust-
    ful dark clouds."

    I feel it all rolling toward and then over the top, I feel the relaxation just beyond. Incredible!

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  14. Nicely done, with the repetition of "mourning seven colored dreams"!
    K

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  15. Beautiful words and expressions used to express some tough concepts here...the word mourning really stands alone to me. Well written, Sreeja.

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  16. I too like the "seven coloured dreams". (For spelling, I am writing in Canada, where we put a "u" in colour!!!!)

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