Saturday, 20 October 2012

Calm!

(From Imaginary Garden With Real Toads-Photo by Laurie Kolp)

As I walk through,
shadows pull along.
As I walk through,
they crawl from under
those heavy rocks of yester-
days; of rattling inner thoughts,
of black clouds of today.
I know there are trees
beyond these rocks,
calm, and their shadows
dance with them
when they sway
with winds
and they don’t stare back as mine!
.......    !
I know I stare back!
Calm! Calm and Calm
Beyond all the limits
there is an ocean, boundless
within my limits
and I hear that music
where shadows melt away.



21 comments:

  1. I like the chanting of calm...there is an ocean inside us ~ Lovely share ~

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  2. Beautiful. I suppose we all try to find our inner peace in the best way we can for us. The start of this shows the inner turmoil, and maybe even fear and then, the voice of sanity seems to guide to calm.
    Lovely imagery.

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  3. Song of the sea...lulling and calming...great write!!

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  4. This is lovely! I love how nature does this for you, too~ I love how you compared the rocks and the turmoil and how we have to keep looking for this
    calm! I loved your poem :D

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  5. You have used the words effectively ... beautifully written !!!

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  6. There is a lovely rhythm to your poem ....

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  7. I love the last stanza. It is so calming; and I like the idea of hearing music where shadows melt away.

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  8. Beautifully done. I love the last two lines.
    K

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  9. This is very beautiful and inspiring.......I especially love "there is an ocean, boundless.......and I hear that music where shadows melt away." One of your best, kiddo. I love it.

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  10. The juxtaposition of the word 'Calm' and the '!' startled me, made me pay attention, forced me to ponder meaning.

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  11. between the trees and the ocean...i feel that calm...nature always does that to me though....

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  12. How lovely to see that everything dark and luring is obliterated by hope. I love the motion and sound in this piece: the pull, the crawl, the walk, the sway, and the music. Very calm and effective. I like the changes here, also. :)

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  13. Love the ending... it's like having to refocus the mind while meditating.

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  14. "within my limits"
    What a wonderful way to think of boundaries and edges, as sometime the limits may disappear into the calm.

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  15. First I was going to say my favorite part was the first stanza, but I went back and I liked the second stanza too and now I cannot pick a favorite part. So that is a sign of a good poem I think! Thanks for participating with my prompt.

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  16. So beautiful...a chant of calm and letting the music of the ocean carry it to you.

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  17. "and i hear that music
    where shadows melt away."

    beautiful! really lovely take on the prompt!

    thanks for participating at Poetry Jam!

    dani

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  18. It's interesting that the calm is found among the shadows and the yesterdays.

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  19. Yes, a calming reflection. How lovely.

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  20. the way you have depicted the shadow as inner self is awesome ....loved it

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  21. Beautiful poem ... how you describe achieving calmness through walking, meditation, visualization ... nice nature metaphors here :)

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