“If we don't place the straitjacket of gender roles on young children,
Poems on 'Gender' at Poets United
Poems with Irony at dVerse Poets Pub
To write a poem and provide annotation at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads
sitting on the
window
i watch a dozen
more buildings,
as rich as a neat
hand work;[CE1]
on my canvas i paint
fresh fruits---
green leaves, red
apples, oranges
and many more shades,
a bit bumpy a bit shallow at places;
they make nests on
buildings
searching,
surveying,
he or she may
have plans
for sun is
nearer this summer;[CE3]
there are more
doves outside,
they make nests on
buildings
and some
engineers are surveying
the new skyscraper on the street
budding, growing---
hill-view flats, their attraction;
the lonely crow
caws,
he or she surveys the JCB
men and women are
employed there,
and they are
being dug out
for houses and
buildings are
to be built in
millions and millions
maybe this time
with… [CE4]
a deserted
valley-view attraction
the crow, he or
she, prudently picks life’s stones
for his or her half
empty bowl of water;
men and women are
digging the earth beneath the feet;
men, women,
crow and all…[CE5]
[CE1]The
green highlighted areas show the irony of life (bumpy and neat, nature and
luxury, real and unreal) of things we choose and things we yearn.
[CE3]Yellow
highlighted area shows how two creations
with almost equal cognitive abilities choose their way of life on earth. The
prudence matters.
[CE4]The
voice used stands for human urgency toward suicidal things, knowledge and
intelligence becomes a mocking irony.
[CE5]Gender
is all about prudence, it is all about how we are brought up, the way we choose
to live, how we perceive our natural instincts and respect them.
Even though I am not good in annotating, I tried my best.
Sreeja, I think you have more than fulfilled the challenge requirements. The poem itself is rich in ideology and ironic wit, and your annotations and hypertext add to the reading experience tremendously. I appreciate the insight the footnotes provide - especially of your method. The highlighting etc serves to break up the reading and remind the reader that this is text for analysis.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your participation.
very creative style and using a lot of ordinary things to hint at deeper meanings, loved the footnotes
ReplyDeleteA wonderful read. I enjoyed both poem and footnotes.
ReplyDeleteThe inclusion of male and female and showing how they share the building--both the necessary nesting and the imprudent taking of natural spaces--makes this gender rich for Poets United. Thank you for showing up with your wisdom.
ReplyDeletethis is wonderful Sreeja...'the crow, he or she, prudently picks life’s stones / for his or her half empty bowl of water;' when it's done life doesn't look so full of irony...love your first stanza...
ReplyDeleteAn excellent read.
ReplyDelete"Doves in urban area stands for human disrespect toward nature." Indeed it does.
Kind regards
Anna :o]
I liked the annotations. The irony is there as well in the different perspectives. Prudence is necessary and yet there is the sense of lack of prudence with the "deserted valley-view".
ReplyDeleteWowww!!❤️ My goodness this is good! There is such depth and detail in this poem.. sigh especially love; "the crow, he or she, prudently picks life’s stones for his or her half empty bowl of water;
ReplyDeletemen and women are digging the earth beneath the feet; prudence marks the sign on their head men, women, crow and all…" Beautifully executed!❤️
Lots of love,
Sanaa
Very impressive philosophical journey in your words!
ReplyDeleteI admire the skill with which you fulfilled both prompts. I especially love the birds building their nest in the small amount of space they have left.
ReplyDeleteSreeja, would you please email me at wildwomantwo@gmail.com? I have a question! Smiles.
ReplyDeleteOk...I have sent the mail..smiles
DeleteOk...I have sent the mail..smiles
DeleteThis is wonderful... and your annotations are as poetic as your poem... it's like reading two poem in one.
ReplyDeleteSkillfully and thoughtfully done and you maintained a high level of artistry
ReplyDeleteThis was an interesting mix of verses and challenges Sreeja ~ Good outcome, smiles ~
ReplyDeleteThank you all....♥♥♥
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