Friday, 21 June 2013

Sedoka

  wild wind whispers close
                                            your songs so distant and soft,
kissing through lush green, still moist!

Your songs, moist and soft
My heart bleeds eons of red roses,
 cherished ever, still moist!



The sedoka is an unrhymed poem consisting of two tercets with a scheme of 5-7-7 and 5-7-7 syllables, a total of 38 syllables. 

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15 comments:

  1. ha. best use of moist i have seen in a while...smiles...beautiful song you sing in your words...the longing is palpable as is the love...

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  2. Lovely.. and the alliterations cater for a wonderful lyrical longing of love...

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  3. You did such a good job mirroring the first and second tercets. Beautiful.

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  4. The refrain in the closing phrases of lines three and six lend a musicality to this poem that speaks to the tradition of the sedoka. Wonderfully done!

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  5. Very romantic especially the second verse ~ Have a lovely weekend ~

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  6. This is a good write... I like the use of alliteration in this as well. I really liked the first line- Wild wind whispers close. It starts this out strong and sets the tone for the rest. Good write! -Mike

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  7. love the lush green and eons of red roses...great work on contrasting colors to carve out the mood..

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  8. loved the textures of 'moist'

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  9. New forms of poetry always excite me ... I will try this one too :-)

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  10. Loved the imagery and the softness here!

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  11. Even a touch of wind can bring back a passionte moment. Beautiful!

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