Friday, 18 October 2013

Waiting to breathe….




trash    like the aftermath of existence
builds like mountains of ego     pride
stingy     yet not giving any lessons of sanity
the cups of life’s ice-creams
packets of spicy snacks
builds on an ice cave of memories lost
silver lining of a frozen cloud
reverberating ocean blue inside
an ancient cave lost under ambitious
stingy mushrooms    waiting….


14 comments:

  1. Such a unique take on the prompt...

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    1. sorry i could not get my comment to post last night so i was testing it...the comparison to mountains of trach and our ego...so apt...i also like the close, that it is waiting...

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  3. You brought in the entire junk yard! Wow. When we build on land fill and fake rock, we have to beware sinking beneath it.

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  4. The opening lines brought this prompt into another direction ~ I'm waiting to breathe myself ~

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  5. Excellent. I like 'trash builds like mountains of ego.'

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  6. Trash as 'ego unchecked' ... fascinating concept. I like this!

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  7. lots going on here - well done

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  8. "reverberating ocean blue inside
    an ancient cave lost"

    This capture so much!! Great poem thank you for writing!!

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  9. Loved the line, "reverberating ocean blue inside." This is a magical poem, and I'm so glad you linked to the Real Toads site. Hope you keep posting with us! Amy (a new Toad)

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  10. wow! if we look deep in our soul we will find many caves like this.

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  11. I like this--some good comparisons with trash and other things in ours lives. Thanks for posting with Poetry Jam.

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