Firefly
George Seeley (1907)
peak of a monsoon flowed turbulent
bedlam
fingers gripped on
emptiness
legs pushing forward
a body
of existence
penumbral being waking in turbulence
seeking vision
play of shadows and lights
in drifting waters
impeccably indecipherable
gaze
consciousness
may be a globule of light waits
the quenching
sight of a voyager
the cypher of being and non-being
circling the globule
body of existence
bedlam in drifting waters
Sreeja, you have blown me away with your excellent word choice in this poem: monsoon, penumbral, globule.. How they all sparkle for me in your brilliantly phrased lines. This is a most beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteI read this over and over, so many great layers and word choices... you really really capture the mysterious aspect of the picture.
ReplyDeleteMy goodness this is absolutely splendid writing, Sreeja!💞 Such brilliant wordplay here especially love; "a globule of light waits the quenching sight of a voyager."💞
ReplyDelete"impeccably indecipherable gaze" just hearing the words aloud of this poem is a present.
ReplyDeleteI love the shape of this poem, Sreeja, and the movement in the language, especially:
ReplyDelete'peak of a monsoon flowed turbulent
bedlam';
'the cypher of being and non-being
circling the globule';
and
'bedlam in drifting waters'.
Oh and the last line, the unexpected bedlam!
ReplyDeleteThe first two lines are definitely my favorite.
ReplyDelete"fingers gripped on emptiness" ... That's too often the way, isn't it?
I love this line as well: "impeccably indecipherable gaze"
Time of the monsoons. I liked various aspects here Sreeja, cleverly thought of, great imagination. Bedlam without mayhem unless the voyager comes with quenching activity.
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body of existence
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This more or less sums up what to expect of her. Can be most intimidating!
Hank
Beautiful word choices for the feel of this poem. Love the way you formatted it.
ReplyDeleteThank you all for the loving comments....!!!
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