Everybody
knows where this road goes
This far stretched
road on a day like this
Sun and
cloud playing hide and seek
Ignorant,me, came unguarded on a day like this
Everybody
knows it’s hard to walk
Miles and
miles in rain and heat
to taste
that rain and know the heat
catching
every nerve of life, I walk and walk
everybody
knows it’s a walk, but no rest
but this
rotten tree and that budding plant
as sight
through eyes and straight to heart
builds me
soul and heart just soul and heart
Everybody
knows, it ends where the road ends
Yet I see a
golden one that's stretching up
And I guess rain and heat
and the entire walk
Moulds you
full and walks you up,safe.
I like where this theme has led your thoughts. Great use of repetition in this poem. I felt that the 3rd stanza had the most impact on me. Thank you for participating on Real Toads.
ReplyDeleteI love to walk in a soft, warm rain but, only if I'm not going anywhere important. This sounds just like life's struggles to me. Sometimes it's a nice walk, sometimes it's all uphill.
ReplyDeleteNicely said Sreeja.
Wow! Two prompts and one great poem. I loved this!
ReplyDelete'ignorant me, come unguarded on a day like this' - excellent, well-placed line. and to be molded full and walked-up safe... such a thing.
ReplyDelete"Sun and cloud playing hide and seek" ... Cute. :)
ReplyDeleteI certainly hope the walk and all its trials takes one to a safe place in the end!! Nice response to the prompt.
ReplyDeleteYes, it is a long hard walk, this road of life.
ReplyDeleteLove the spiritual vibe in this, that glimmer of hope held by the golden road rising up. Really enjoyed this poem!
ReplyDeleteLife is a long and winding road...some of it hard but there are those joy turns in the road..lovely poem
ReplyDeleteNice piece! it is a song you know-
ReplyDeleteIt could be sung as you walk! thanks for visiting-
Love this. I felt like I was walking up, too.........
ReplyDeleteThis is a great mashup of the two prompts. The repetition of words works particularly well for you here. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you!
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just even the first lines take you on a journey along the road. thankyou!
ReplyDeleteI like the thought that both the comfort and the pain build the soul more rich and full than just one or the other. Great contemplative poem, Sreeja!
ReplyDeleteto taste that rain and know the heat
ReplyDeletecatching every nerve of life, I walk and walk
Beautiful.
I like this. Lots of walks in life are hard and do seem to catch every nerve....but I liked the optimism expressed in this poem. I thank you for linking to Poetry Jam (where one of my poems resides) and also to Imaginary Gardens With Real Toads where another of my poems resides!
ReplyDeleteI love the idea that we cannot live with just sadness or just happiness but both are needed...bitter sweet.
ReplyDeletenice...i like the rotted tree as it contrasts well to the golden one in that last stanza...very lyrical youself in this...and a strong spirituality...
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