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Night stays at
window
Near my bed
Not now
But when I
wasn’t even a teenager
It stays there
And stares
Someone’s staring
isn’t so pleasing
It’s not that childhood is gone
It’s there in a different dimension
It stares
I pull my eyes
close to my heart
There is
something there
There
is something inside the heart
A bit
icy, a bit warm, fluffy, lively and strange
That something
hugs me in
Then it spreads
glow worms
And fairies and
some cute elfins
The night now
has no choice
It gets pensive
Looks around
And no longer
stares
What should I call that friend
The friend who has collected all my days
The whole past and
Gifted it as wisdom
Night doesn’t
stare any longer
That friend is a
rainbow climber
A dream chaser
A smiling
forgiver
An eternal lover
A nameless
partner
There
is something inside the heart
A bit
icy, a bit warm, fluffy, lively and strange
A
friend forever
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ReplyDeleteParticularly like the line: A bit icy, a bit warm, fluffy, lively and strange
ReplyDeleteI think we could all do with a mix of that in our souls
This is a strange and mysterious poem about something strange and mysterious. It's left me wondering.
ReplyDeletefriend who collected my past and returned it as wisdom..like that!!
ReplyDeleteSo sorry, unexpected visitors last night have made me rather late in responding to your piece. Terrifically original, I thought - really enjoyed reading this...
ReplyDeleteThis is so visually appealing. I love the font, white space, and staggered alignment.
ReplyDeleteThis is my favorite line: "Then it spreads glow worms" ... It reminds me of my own childhood. I loved my little Glow Worm pal. :)
I was lost in the mystery here.
ReplyDeleteChildhood not being gone, but there in a different dimension is intriguing!
ReplyDeleteThe night is filled with mystery... the way you have put the stanzas made me think that you where jumping between being awake and sleeping.
ReplyDeleteI particularly liked the description of the inside of the heart...so true. There are many aspects to our hearts.
ReplyDeleteI was transported to where reality and dreams meet. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteI like the differnt aspects of Night, specially:
ReplyDeleteAn eternal lover
A nameless partner
There is something inside the heart
ReplyDeleteA bit icy, a bit warm, fluffy, lively and strange
A friend forever
There is something in us that keeps us protected and happy! Many realize this at moments of happiness or despair!
Hank
This is absolutely riveting!!❤️
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ReplyDeleteI loved this complex story -- a contrary friend who serves many roles. And the honesty of the writer is refreshing. Very well done.
Question: Your name is sreeja harikrishnan, a Hindu name, but you write in your poem about elfins and fairies. Were you raised in the West and these images come naturally, or are you playing to the readers and avoiding talking of apsaras, yakshas, devi and more?
Verb Tense Edit suggestions: (I speak several languages too)
The night now have[has] no choice
The friend who have[has] collected all my days
I am a hindu and very much brought up in hindu culture. But I was educated in a Christian missionary school...in English medium....after that college education was in Hindi ....and my mother tongue is Malayalam...so...well, I hope you can imagine the situation....
DeleteAnd sorry for grammar glitches...I don't know why it happens...but when I am in a mood to re read what I have written, I do correct them...I will keep in mind to do it every time...
And thank you so much for your valuable observation...it helped me...
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DeleteCool, thank you for sharing. I lived for 2 years in the subcontinent and use to speak a good bit of Hindi but no Dravidian tongues. I know wonder of bouncing between several languages and that is why I shared. Thanx for not minding. Again, very fun imagery -- funny about the Christian Missionary School. For a very short time I taught High School up in Woodstock (a missionary school in North India, which you may know) and similarly, in a school in Pakistan.
DeleteWell, now I remember you once responded to some Hindi or Indian words I used in my poem some years back...happy to know you speak many languages..
DeleteI don't know what you found funny...but for me the fun part is that I tossed between the idea of whom to worship, Krishna or christ....as a kid in school...eventually I returned to Krishna...
Well there are as many schools as stars in India....I don't remember the one you mentioned. ...
DeleteI said "Fun imagery" not that it was "funny"
It seems like you erased one of your comments saying you embraced Krishna and not Jesus. I think it matters not what we embrace but HOW we embrace it. Everything is myth, it is how we use our myths.
In your poem, your nameless friend is as complex as the Heros in the contrary Mahabharata with no clear good and bad and contrary traits of a person to fear and a person to love. I see you have posted many Siva pictures and say you are a Krishnavite, but it is all a twist of our inner psyche, no?
:-) :-)
DeleteThe same comment got repeated, I deleted that.
I returned to Krishna because of the unique character. ...an apt idol for kaliyuga....a lot to learn from him. You need an idol at times...otherwise I meditate on my breath...the all pervading energy.
All my God paintings are done on order...they are all sold.
There is nothing more complex than human mind...
Mahabharatha is an ocean....it gives you immense knowledge on human psychology. ...but it needs to be interpreted the right way....you are right it's not about bad or good....
DeleteMaybe night finally understands, and that is why "Night doesn’t stare any longer"
ReplyDeleteThis for me was a truly wise and whimsical read, thanks for dropping in to read mine.
much love...
This was delightful and very enjoyable! A friend forever is the best.
ReplyDeleteThere is something in the heart indeed! (This is difficult to read because of the background. You might think of changing it to something simpler in order to engage more readers.)☺️
ReplyDeleteThank you all for the insight full comments....♥♥♥
ReplyDeleteWow! I love this! Very powerful and moving sentiments! The last two verses really spoke to me! (PS I have chronic health issues and still catching up to the last OLN). x
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