where your thoughts can go with
consciousness that’s the extend of my presence
and when you wither away as dry fibres
and bones, know that i have withdrawn
i am your green and blossomed dreams
that you walk on grass-grown aisles
and when you walk and crawl on dried
cracked mud, know that i am gone
i am the presence between your skin
and the ether, that’s how you feel harmonious
and when you writhe in hot air burning
in your own sin, know that i have forsaken
i am your greatest epic on which you
built your believes, songs, joys and hopes
and when you find yourself with no
meaning, song and tale, know that i am worn
whine
not afterwards
for even your tears are my sparks
I loved this Sreeja as it presented the same view that I was trying to put across but perhaps in a more lyrical way.
ReplyDeleteThank you...yours has that punch that all must feel...!
DeleteLove the tone and texture of this poem Sreeja.
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DeleteI love this voice of our Life. Beautiful, Sreeja.
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DeleteOh my goodness! Ouch! Truth in beautiful verse. I feel the elixir now in every instance of being alive.
ReplyDeleteoh ...thank you so much...!!
DeleteElixir and ode to life itself. Luv the quality of water as constant. Luv this
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thank you...love!
DeleteThis is beautiful to read. Wonderful images in this poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much!
DeleteYour words are indeed beautiful to read and strangely calming. Well done.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Oh...thank you so much!
DeleteBeautiful poetry, and photo. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
Deletewhine not afterwards
ReplyDeletefor even your tears
are my sparks
Very good close Sreeja and great word-craft throughout!
Hank
Thank you Hank!
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